Released my first eBook this weekend

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  1. Mutha Brucka

    Mutha Brucka I ♥ Huge Boobs

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    After months of slaving away at the keyboard, I've finally finished my eBook, God Needs To Go, which is available now on all Kindle devices as well as all other mobile devices that support the Kindle application. Let me just say that writing wasn't always a walk in the park, but I've followed many threads on this site from time to time pertaining to Atheism and writing in general, and both have helped me immensely. Thanks to everyone for the inspiration.

    http://www.amazon.com/God-Needs-To-Go-ebook/dp/B00AR83HIW/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&qid=1356215206&sr=8-1&keywords=god+needs+to+go
     
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    I am currently reading 3 books on my kindle now but when I am done I may have to check this out. Congrats though on all of your hard work.
     
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    Mutha Brucka I ♥ Huge Boobs

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    Thanks. This is my first venture into the public forum. It's always been a dream of mine and I hope the criticism from this book, both good and bad, will help me grow as an author.
     
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    There are several errors of usage and grammar in your Amazon summary.

    brings to light the "negatives" -- negative is an adjective, not a noun. It is beginning to enter popular usage as a noun, but this is a misuse of the word. It leaves the question... negative what? Negative effects? Negative consequence?

    that Christianity "posses" on our -- I'm not sure if this should have been "poses for" or if you spelled possess wrong and are misusing it. But there is some problem here.

    daunting task "lay" -- lay is transitive and is the simple past of lie. I think the word you want is "lies", which is both intransitive and present tense. The task lies in your hands but you lay the information in front of us today. The difference is that lay requires an object but lie can be the subject acting on itself. I lie in bed but I lay the book on the table. If we take this to be the past, then it implies that the task is already finished. In any case, might want to clarify that.
     
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    Michaelangelo Okay USA Platinum Member

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    Looks like you found yourself a copy editor TS.
     
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    Congrats man.
     
  7. Mutha Brucka

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    Thank you for bringing this to my attention. It was something I threw together just before making it available, so I haven't even given myself time to review it. I appreciate it greatly, though.
     
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    Minnja Touch-Butt white belt Platinum Member

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    Good luck, I hope lots of people buy it!
     
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    Is the collection of arguments from this forum?

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    Lead /Led/ Staff Member Senior Moderator

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    Is one chapter titled, "My bad church experience"?
     
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    after seeing your name i find your sherdog screen name funny
     
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    Lead /Led/ Staff Member Senior Moderator

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    That is an awesome last name. It's like something they would give a BA army Sargent in a fiction novel just to add to the idea that guy is BA
     
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    I titled that one "My Fall from 'Grace'" lol appropriately so.
     
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    Who were your biggest influences, on sherdog?
     
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    JonKunDo Postin 25/8

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    I don't wanna be a dick here because I think it's great that you've been writing this. But after reading the preview there seem to be a lot of factual as well as logical errors; partly revolving around the ambiguity in subject matter. At no point in history have the 'greater majority of all human beings' believed in Christianity for starters...

    I mean this in a constructive way; you might wanna consider focusing specifically on the influence of Christianity in the United States (which you inadvertently seem to be). Or better still a more specific case study, be that your own experiences or whatever; because as it is I get the impression that it's just gonna be a diffuse cluster-fuck of personal opinions.

    Sorry, wish you luck with it, but that's my feedback based on the little I've read.
     
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    May I ask why you chose Christianity as your target?

    "God needs to go; A collection of arguments against Christianity"

    Any mention of Islam or Judaism in there? It seems that Christianity makes an easy target for people where people are afraid of the other main religions. Christianity in a lot of countries is rather benign, it only seems to have some major influence in a select few European countries and the US. Of course over a few countries in Africa and Asia as well.

    Good luck with the book mate. Hope you sell heaps.
     
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    The wise are instructed by reason, average minds by experience, the stupid by necessity and the brute by instinct.
     
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    If he wanted to make a decent argument for "God", he could've addressed the God of Abraham which is where all three stem from. But from the sample, it looks like the book focuses a lot on rhetoric than content.
     
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    that was sort of what I was going for - the whole judeo christian thing
     
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    Best of luck dude!
     

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