Writing my first book. Sex, drugs and vale tudo. Added new chapter.

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Years ago I went to Brazil to train MMA, got into all kinds of crazy things and penned down my adventures. I rewrote them a hundred times and I figured it might be cool to release them in a book. Dunno if many Sherbros are into reading? If I ever get to a finished product, and people enjoy my writing I would donate it all to charity anyway. Here is an excerpt. Feel free to leave me a comment or some critique. I also shot a ton of pictures, but will have to figure out how to post them here.

SPARRING

Everybody heard, everybody watched and everybody saw the gruesome sparring sessions of the former Chute Boxe team on the internet, which were supposed to prepare the fighters for real ring experience. And hell they did, accumulating tons of victories and belts throughout time and numerous organisations. Once the old Chute Boxe fell apart, many new coaches kept the tradition running, including Cristiano (Marcello).

Some of the sparring sessions I saw were better than many fights I saw. One day I saw Felipe Silva (the UFC lightweight) totally dominate a UFC heavyweight that would rather not be mentioned. At that time, Felipe was not signed to the UFC but just a Muay Thai champ who barely dipped his toes in MMA.

I saw Ariel Machado, who is currently signed by Glory, fighting Marcao, who won the Nitrix Tournament. The gym didn’t have caged walls at the time but just some boxing bags on the floors to mark its limits. Somewhere they managed to get over the boxing bags but kept sparring until they reached the locker rooms, between the spectators. Everybody of the team had stopped sparring, went looking and started cheering and clapping their hands. Once the round was over, both guys hugged it out and got off the mats with a smile.

But still, even if the sparring was often more than brutal, it wasn’t some brain dead knock till you drop type of fighting. Both fighters always agreed on sparring hard and made sure they were matched equally. There was absolutely no use of beating up somebody that was less skilled or injuring somebody. In all these years, I only saw a guy get knocked out 4 or 5 times, and often, it was because they tried incredibly dumb things and paid the price for it (I saw a guy attempt a flying knee but knock himself out hitting the gym wall once).

I often sparred, but I made clear I didn’t want to be mauled as many fighters skillsets were dimensions apart from mine. And it got respected, unlike in many Muay Thai and MMA gyms in Europe where there always happens to be a guy going way too hard against lesser competition, preferably kids or women.

Not here. Dinis made me clear that it had no use of going crazy against somebody who didn’t have the right tools, although it didn’t mean they were going to let you off easy. The goal was that you improve your striking, footwork, head movement and defence, not to have you carried away on a stretcher.

The guys treated the training sessions as work. Instead of going to the office, they were going to the 10 am wrestling class. Instead of going to a late night business meeting, they were fighting on an undercard of a promotion. It wasn’t the most common job, but it was just a job after all. There was no use to act bad on the job, not in an office, not in the gym. That would have been unprofessional, they told me.

Although some of the new guys were less skilled, fighting was often their primary source of income, sometimes combined with security work. If they got injured, it would have serious consequences for them, their other job and their families, who were often counting on that one measly paycheck from a hole in the wall promotion. That paycheck, often fed a family for a whole month, made sure mom was able to pay her rent and dad got to put fuel in his car.

Everybody was told to leave their ego at the door, and it was necessary. Imagine 30 guys, all on top of the food chain, living together on bunk beds in a small dorm, sharing the same toilet, the same kitchen and the same shower. In many situations it would create tension, not but not here. The guys here were working on a better future, on a better life for them and their families and chose to get along for their own good.
 
I don't like this sentence.

"Everybody heard, everybody watched and everybody saw the gruesome sparring sessions of the former Chute Boxe team on the internet, "

Wouldn't this sentence be better:

" Everybody saw the gruesome sparring sessions of the former Chute Boxe team on the internet, "
 
Stick to info blog. I see no talent in creative writing.
 
I don't like this sentence.

"Everybody heard, everybody watched and everybody saw the gruesome sparring sessions of the former Chute Boxe team on the internet, "

Wouldn't this sentence be better:

" Everybody saw the gruesome sparring sessions of the former Chute Boxe team on the internet, "



TS has to make his 50 page dictionary into 800 pages.

Looking forward for more TS. Quite interesting.
 
I have a title for you
"Confessions of a B-level athlete: how I earned less then 30,000 a year cawkfighting"

seriously though good on you, writing a book is a big endeavor good luck
 
I have a title for you
"Confessions of a B-level athlete: how I earned less then 30,000 a year cawkfighting"

seriously though good on you, writing a book is a big endeavor good luck

man I wish I was a B level athlete hahahaha
 
I'd recommend doing some reading on writing. While the content is ok, some of it's not that well presented (in my opinion)

For example I'd change

"The guys treated the training sessions as work. Instead of going to the office, they were going to the 10 am wrestling class. Instead of going to a late night business meeting, they were fighting on an undercard of a promotion. It wasn’t the most common job, but it was just a job after all. There was no use to act bad on the job, not in an office, not in the gym. That would have been unprofessional, they told me."

to
"The guys weren't going to training sessions, they were going to work. Their morning meeting was a 10 AM wrestling class, and staying late in the office was a fight on the undercard of a local promotion. It wasn't a regular job, but it was their job."

I think I would leave out that last line in this specific part as it doesn't really reference anything in the rest of the paragraph.
or change it to something like
"You don't mess around in wrestling class, or turn up late for a fight. That would be unprofessional, they told me."


I have a title for you
"Confessions of a B-level athlete: how I earned less then 30,000 a year cawkfighting"

seriously though good on you, writing a book is a big endeavor good luck

You say it as a joke, but that title would be quite good actually.
 
Years ago I went to Brazil to train MMA, got into all kinds of crazy things and penned down my adventures. I rewrote them a hundred times and I figured it might be cool to release them in a book.


Why would somebody read a book made up of the same thing rewritten a hundred times?

It's a waste of paper too.
 
It needs more sex and violence. For example, here's an excerpt from my own book "Watch it :eek::eek::eek::eek::eek::eek: or I'll kick your ass."

I could hear the crowd going wild as I stepped in the ring. Another record breaking sold out fight. There were so many people who wanted to see my awesomeness they'd had to add an extra arena to Madison Square. I nodded humbly, acknowledging the fans devotion to me. Then the ref winked and patted me on the ass suggestively. I spun round angrily and whispered "Watch it :eek::eek::eek::eek::eek::eek: or I'll kick your ass." He recoiled in fear. "I'm...I'm sorry Thundercock...I couldn't help it. You're so amazing..You're the best fight guy I've ever seen...I...I love you dude." I nodded, "It's ok man. Just keep your hands off the jewels eh."

It was time. I pranced around the ring like a fresh pony in a meadow to the delight of the audience. The fighter dude stood sulking in his corner, obviously he knew he was about to get his ass pounded. Hard. The ref called us together and told us not to hit each other in the balls. I went back to my corner, flexing my glistening muscles which were coated in a special butter oil. The crowd went crazy. They adored me. I was Adonis.

The bell rang. I turned round, walked over and touched gloves with the fighter guy. Then I punched him in the fucking face as hard as I could. My fist smashing straight into his fucking nose. The blood sprayed everywhere as I spun round like a fuckin ninja and kicked him straight in the fuckin head with the force of a train on steroids. He went down and I jumped on him like a cat and began pounding the shit out of his fuckin face. My fists went down BAM BAM BAM, covered in his fuckin blood. I could see the shock and fear in his eyes as blows rained down on his fuckin head, turning his cheeks to mush. His lips split. His teeth shattered. My cock grew hard.

Suddenly the ref was pulling me off. It was over. The noise from the crowd was deafening. The fighter guy was a bloody puddle of flesh in the corner. I breathed deeply, put down my Xbox controller and went to the fridge for a beer.
 
Good luck, fella. Long road ahead, but if you make it there, you will have done what a lot of people dream about doing.
 
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