November 25th (original song)

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  1. CrimsonFan

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    I liked the first song. I's clear that your vocals is not your strong suit, but you make it work and are a stong guitar player. Did you write the song and melody? It's pretty good.

    Second song was great. Not my style personally, but you guys go well together, hormonize well and your lead singer is good.

    How far are you? Do you have recorded tracks?
     
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    I wrote both songs.

    I've been in several gigging acts, I'm just showing what I'm working on right now. Glad you liked it. Means alot to me
     
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    A few more reviews would be appreciated

    Last bump
     
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    Those are both good songs. Your guitar playing is very solid and consistent. Second song has some really nice licks.

    A little constructive criticism... Go for it with your vocals a bit more. In the first song you are holding back from transitioning from your head voice to your belly voice. I would work on the dynamics of your vocal intensity. It looks like you already know where it is needed and not needed. Don't worry about if you think you have a good voice or not. There is a hollow sense to the song when it lacks this.

    Finally I'm not a big fan of pumping out "baby, honey, darling" like that lyrically but it is sort of irrelevant to being helpful criticism.

    Keep it up and good luck.
     

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