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Old 06-17-2014, 01:00 PM   #11
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TS, good article. Your use of language is good, but your grammar is pretty mediocre. That doesn't matter if you just plan on blogging, I suppose. If you want to work as a journalist though, you should work on it.

I hope you don't take this as too critical, my intentions are to help. You have several sentences that are really long run ons.

"Rory’s last finish was against Che Mills in April 2012, and although it can be argued that his major step up in competition since then has made it harder to produce finishes, I believe, like many, Rory has in some ways lost his killer instinct taking a rather smarter approach to fighting and trying his best not to get hurt." Stuff like this needs to be multiple sentences. There are a lot of them, and some fragments as well.

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Old 06-17-2014, 01:00 PM   #12
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If promoted as GSPs heir in Canada he will sell regardless of how boring he is.

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Old 06-17-2014, 01:06 PM   #13
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If this was Rory's final version, I wouldn't want him as champion. But since he continues to improve, it's not, and the fun part is now to watch him grow as a fighter. He's almost 25, his personality won't change by much. He'll maybe open up some more, but this is pretty much it.

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Old 06-17-2014, 01:14 PM   #14
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He would be boring champ.

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Old 06-17-2014, 01:25 PM   #15
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The kid has been pro since he was SIXTEEN!!
He's not some converted collegiate wrestler or BJJ champ looking for new revenue streams. This is what he committed to since childhood, and he's only getting better.

He's 24 years old and ranked in the top 3 at Welterweight in the world........So chances are VERY good he will eventually get his hands on that belt, At which point both he and Jordan Mein will duke it out once Mein catches up.

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